I love what you have going on this track, but the drums really need to be punchier, and the percussion is lacking some brass. As is, they end up sounding muddy and your other levels can't go up without drowning the drums too much. More defined drums mean they can be a little quieter and still cut through the mix and sound crisp, which is really what I feel this track needs.
I'm definitely into your composition though, keep at it, man!
Thank you for review! I saw mistake with drums after uploading song... It was sad... :(
I honestly can't tell whether you're trolling with this submission or not, but I'll assume you're not and give you a proper review.
There is no discernible tempo, time signature, beat, or progression. You use one bad, grating, pitch-shifted sound and one synth. This is, in no way, related to Pico Day. I'm really sorry, but it looks like you need to do some research into music composition or even listen to some electronic shit and really pay attention to its production.
I hate to sound like a prick, but this is barely a song, it's a bunch of clashing twangs over a synth with no beat.
this is a crezy song, fr pcio dey!
That beat, that harpsichord (?).
Very fucking cool concept for a song, the only Victorian Ballad I can really recall. Good choice in vocaloid, awesome beat, good samples, great mixing. Everything comes together rather nicely and it creates a really unique experience. There's not really anything I have to compare this to to provide better critique.
However, one thing is that "Laissez" is pronounced Lah-SAY, not LAY-siz. Additionally, the opening chorus sound more unnatural than the rest of the choruses. I'm not sure whether this is intentional or a result of there being less musical elements to cover it, but it's an issue for a very short period and only affects the track in a minor way.
Ahh well i think the pronounciation varies depending on the dialect.
Anothing thing is oliver (the vocaloid) sounded funny when saying Lah Say so we went with Lay Sez and decided not to make the Z silent cos it sounds like his saying "lazy fare" plus his 12 and an urchin i think correct pronounciations is the least of his worries hehehe
anyway thanks for the review really appreciate. As for the intro thats the result of either over compression on the vocaloid or lack of details in tuning
It does what it sets out to do, and it does it well. That's really all I can say about this piece. The samples and post-production are very clean, allowing one to focus on the melody, which is really the important part of this song.
One thing I don't like is that, as a song, it leaves a little to be desired. Personally, I believe a great melody will have issues carrying a song if that's all it has going for it. Throughout the whole track, one's ear is constantly attracted to the light piano riff when there's clearly good string presence there.
The bottom line is that, as a soundtrack, it does its job incredibly well (I left this on for like 15 minutes before I remembered it was playing and came back to review). As a song, it seems like you could have taken advantage of the nice string samples you used a little more, but it's still definitely nice to listen to.
Good stuff man!
Extremely strong beat, fairly strong flow and lyrics, and I personally feel that most of the technical mechanics are well implemented. The use of a female vocalist's chanting as the hook went nicely with the flowing synths and "poppy" drum beat.
Unfortunately, I feel that the duet vocals really detract from most of it. The general airy sound seems like it could do without the backup vocals. I'm not sure if this is actually the issue or if it would sound better if the backup vocalist sounded more energetic but was mixed at the same volume.
In short, I feel like this song is well written with lots of good instrumentation and vocal devices, but really needs some cleaning up to reach its massive potential.
I really appreciate the review, buddy. Glad you liked the female vocalist part, I was worried that wouldn't mesh well. And I can see where you're coming from with the back up vocals, very well said. Thanks again dude!
Overall very good track, but has a couple areas it could be improved on.
For one, did you attempt mixing a bit of reverb on whispering vocals? Using a slight degree of it tends to soften up the hard consonant sounds to a level that seems like it would be more consistent with the instrumentation.
Secondly, the ABBBC rhyme pattern in the first 5 lines of the chorus seems to heavily detract from the otherwise solid songwriting. Though this may be personal, I find that using too many end rhymes in a row tends to lean towards a more juvenile sound.
Other than that, everything from the synths to (a large majority of) the mixing is extremely well done.
Thanks for the feedback, man! Appreciate the informative response... I'll keep this in mind when I record the next album :)
Amazingly written song with both good vocals and good (if slightly repetitive/blending) guitar, but it's very clear that it's missing mixing/mastering, which would improve the sound a great deal. To be honest, it sounds that even if something as simple as recording on 2 tracks and mixing volume levels would be enough.
It's fairly well covered, I'll give you that. However, a few things prevent it from having a higher rating.
You didn't bring anything new to the table with this cover, just sounded like you were trying to replicate the sound of the original. I've already heard the song the way it was written by the original artist, I want to hear something else.
Failing the above point, it seems that you've over-processed your voice to a point where it grates on one's ears at certain points, and doesn't sound all that amazing at the points when it doesn't. The basis of what you're trying to do is definitely there, but you need to tone down the delay and flange at some parts.
Summary: Well-done cover, but try to experiment a little more and play with your mixing a bit.
Good as a concept.
This is an excellent song, and it has lots of dynamics. I like the main hook that keeps being played (0:01- 0:05), and it's really catchy. I like the extra reverb added in, as well.
The only advice I can really give is the really obvious one: Get a new microphone. The fuzz kind of overlays the entire song and is a bit of a distraction.
There's also some awkward moments while you're moving your fingers to the right notes on the fretboard (Not the scratching on the strings, I like that, and think it adds a neat effect to the song), such as at 0:40 so if you could clean that up or maybe even edit that out, it would be perfect.
Good luck if you decide to redo this!
Pretty damn good!
I like the warm sound of the synth, it goes well over the drums, which are also played with pretty much perfect tune and beat. They were really a definitive part of the music, and really drove it in a good way.
This song just has a happy, lively vibe going to it, and I like it!
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